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Hi everyone, 

I would like to thank you in advance for reading my question i have written and essay and would like help understanding if i have hit the major points the question is asking of me and if not what can i add-to make it a better paper. Grammar and punctuation  check would be appreciated as well. I will list the topic question i have selected below with the instructions given as well as my essay.

Question:

Should we constrain or eliminate factory farming of animals? Is “old McDonald” farming of animals a morally permissible use of them?